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03-09-2011
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Join Date: Jun 2007
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Re: Another Paradigm Shift process
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And the one before: talking And the one before: talking And the one before: talking and so on... "Show, don't tell" is a rule of thumb in writing which means actions speak better than words so keep the exposition to a bare minimum. If you do need to have a back and forth convo going, at least keep things happening at the same time. The two protagonists have been driving around talking for what feels like forever now and it's really gotten irritating and repetitive.
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