Why does that spell even exist? (BE story)

[megalomaniac]

Yay, brick joke:lol: love the twist on the AP grow

[DevonCory]

This is pretty damn good. I feel that the growth may not be as detailed as it could be, and that the sexual aspect of the story is a little underplayed. However, I can definitely see this as an ongoing serie where that particular aspect get explored further as the Sorceress grow into her own sexuality.

Overall I really like the style of it. And the characters are pretty nice. This has really become my favorite when-is-the-next-chapter-coming-out-I'd-like-to-see-what-happens-next story. I can't wait for one of the girl to finally lose it, get overwhelmed with lust and go wow-size. I thought that that was it with the Princess, but... well.

Do you have any other BE story floating around? I'd like to read more.

Keep it up! You've definitely got a fan here!

[Chaos Echo]

Originally Posted by DevonCory

This is pretty damn good. I feel that the growth may not be as detailed as it could be, and that the sexual aspect of the story is a little underplayed. However, I can definitely see this as an ongoing serie where that particular aspect get explored further as the Sorceress grow into her own sexuality.

Overall I really like the style of it. And the characters are pretty nice. This has really become my favorite when-is-the-next-chapter-coming-out-I'd-like-to-see-what-happens-next story. I can't wait for one of the girl to finally lose it, get overwhelmed with lust and go wow-size. I thought that that was it with the Princess, but... well.

Do you have any other BE story floating around? I'd like to read more.

Keep it up! You've definitely got a fan here!

Thanks for the appreciation!

As for the expansion itself, I know, I have issues drawing it out. I'm trying to work on making it more detailed.

I have no other BE story going, but I have been mulling over TG shorts whenever I come up with ideas.

And as for this one, I've got the next chapter completely planned out, and three more vaguely outlined.

[DevonCory]

Originally Posted by Chaos Echo

As for the expansion itself, I know, I have issues drawing it out. I'm trying to work on making it more detailed.

I'm not a prolific writer, I haven't made anything public in a few years. But if I may humbly suggest...
When I do BE, I feel that details make or break a story. The main reason being that the growth process is often more important than the end result, IMHO.

To help the reader visualize what I'm trying to describe, I often have my ladies grow out of their clothes. Simply trying to describe a growing breast is a little vague, but detailing how a blouse is hanging loose, how it's filling up, how it's tightening, how the buttons are flying of and how the blouse is ripping at the seams gives the reader a kind of reference for his imagination. It's easier to imagine a blouse at these various stages than the breasts responsible for it. It's the same reason why it's often helpful to compare breasts to fruits or sports balls - most of us have seen a watermellon, but very few can say the same for a breast that size.

I also find it useful to use the characters themselves to describe a scene. As the writer, that's part of your job, but the ladies can chime in too, expressing their surprise, fear, lust or appreciation for whatever's happening. It makes for a more interactive read than just going through one description after the other, and it makes the characters more lively. That's something you did in chapter 3, when the Princess realize that her breasts are growing. She doesn't know how to react, but she's enjoying it. The way she express herself:

"Ruhtina, already hot and bothered, was having a hard time forming coherent sentences. ?Oh my! Oh?. Oh my! What did? what is? oh my?? Her own hands rushed to her breasts, affirming that they were indeed becoming more and more plump. ?Ooh... you? you have a spell to grow these? Is that what you were... ohhh? talking about with that otheoooohhhh mmyyyy??

...is pretty sweet and is definitely a technique which you should keep using.

Originally Posted by Chaos Echo

And as for this one, I've got the next chapter completely planned out, and three more vaguely outlined.

Good to hear. Can't wait.

[Chaos Echo]

Originally Posted by hyperspeedluck

I love the characters and the story and theres a fan here too. Just gonna say though if the stories gonna get dark don't make it too dark as one of the great things about it is the lightness which it has.

How dark is too dark? I mean, it'll only be for the next chapter, but I don't want to be off-putting here.

Originally Posted by DevonCory

I'm not a prolific writer, I haven't made anything public in a few years. But if I may humbly suggest...
When I do BE, I feel that details make or break a story. The main reason being that the growth process is often more important than the end result, IMHO.

To help the reader visualize what I'm trying to describe, I often have my ladies grow out of their clothes. Simply trying to describe a growing breast is a little vague, but detailing how a blouse is hanging loose, how it's filling up, how it's tightening, how the buttons are flying of and how the blouse is ripping at the seams gives the reader a kind of reference for his imagination. It's easier to imagine a blouse at these various stages than the breasts responsible for it. It's the same reason why it's often helpful to compare breasts to fruits or sports balls - most of us have seen a watermellon, but very few can say the same for a breast that size.

I also find it useful to use the characters themselves to describe a scene. As the writer, that's part of your job, but the ladies can chime in too, expressing their surprise, fear, lust or appreciation for whatever's happening. It makes for a more interactive read than just going through one description after the other, and it makes the characters more lively. That's something you did in chapter 3, when the Princess realize that her breasts are growing. She doesn't know how to react, but she's enjoying it. The way she express herself:

"Ruhtina, already hot and bothered, was having a hard time forming coherent sentences. ?Oh my! Oh?. Oh my! What did? what is? oh my?? Her own hands rushed to her breasts, affirming that they were indeed becoming more and more plump. ?Ooh... you? you have a spell to grow these? Is that what you were... ohhh? talking about with that otheoooohhhh mmyyyy??

...is pretty sweet and is definitely a technique which you should keep using.



Good to hear. Can't wait.

Ah. Thanks for the advice. I have problems elaborating on things, which is one of the reasons I'm writing this, to help out with that. And to flesh out (heh) the characters here, as I've had them in my mind for ages now, and wanted to make something out of them. And, most obviously, for growing boobies.