My First Story: The Moon Coin - Page 4

GenYun · 12-21-2006

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Originally Posted by ximpa

And, from what I read, the story seems to focus too much on the process itself.

I don't know if you've noticed, but the theme, title and aim of this board is in fact to cover 'The Process'.

ximpa · 12-21-2006

Yes, but why not create a story that revolves around it? It would be much more satisfying IMO. Otherwise you get a bunch of images and stories that all look like the same. Even a tiny plot can do better than a overly long and overdetailed description.

roadside_fury · 12-21-2006

Again, like he said, this is "The Process". That's what we focus on. We have way too many transformation movies, stories, and show focus on plot and character design, yet leaves the transformation lacking. Outside this website, I want plot and stuff, but here, it's all about the process, which in this case is done fantastically.

ximpa · 12-21-2006

Quote:

Originally Posted by roadside_fury

I want plot and stuff, but here, it's all about the process, which in this case is done fantastically.

I disagree, I only see potential talent wasted and overuse of sexual overtones. But I don't want to argue as it would be pointless.

Rei-Lin · 12-21-2006

I can see your angle ximpa, and it is understandable that not everybody will enjoy a story for the same reasons. I have been enjoying focusing on the transformation aspects because I orginally started writing this story to see if I could write a transformation scene with so much detail that somebody could get a very vivid image in their head about what was happening. I think in terms of seeing my words animated first, and then try to put that action into writing. And of course, the sexual overtones are just a part of my way of getting away a little bit from the normal idea that most transformations in writing are neither enjoyable nor wanted. I like the idea of a body transformation that is intended to feel good, and of course in my twisted mind, feeling good is mostly related to a sort of sexual desire. If you read the whole story up to where I stopped, you'll see that not ever transformation involves having sex or masturbation, even if it starts to look like it wants to at the start. I even added more to the story and brought in another few characters to add a little more substance to the whole thing.

Again, it's not easy to cater to every audience, but I am trying. There's a lot more plot to come about, and if you have been reading the story all the way, you'll probably notice some subtle hints in the plot that will tell you that not all of what Sally thinks is going on is going on for a good reason. I think some of it wasn't even intentional on my part, but I've started to reinforce the idea about consequences of actions. Anyway, again, I'm sorry if the story doesn't or can't appeal to everybody but the sexual overtones and long drawn out transformation scenes will remain a part of the story. That's the aspect on which the entire story was created on, and I could not undo it now. All I ask is that you read the story all the way through or wait until I've evolved things a little further and try again and then see if it's a better story than you thought it was. If it's not for you of course, it's not for you, I'm the same way when it comes to writing, some stories just don't do it for me. But I do appreciate the comments and the spurs to continue the story, and I appreciate constructive criticisim as I won't always see things that others will. In the end, I'm doing all this for the fans of the transformation, and I hope to add enough of a story that it becomes like a good werewolf movie with kick ass transformation scenes, rather than an ok movie with three second morphing scenes.

Dragon FangX · 12-21-2006

Your doing fine, Rei-Lin in my opinion. Keep doing what your doing as its been great thus far. ^^

gokowildheart · 12-30-2006

Wow .. just wow ... this is the most impressive well detail transformation story i've had the pleasure to read ... I'm really blow away by the amount of detail you've put ito every charge .. you can see it so well it's almost like watching a film .. I take my hat off to you Rei-Lin and would love to see how your going to carry this story on and see how the new couple handle this new power ^^

JaeDy · 12-30-2006

Honestly, way up at the top in my opinion ^^

Brilliant stories.

Karbon · 01-06-2007

Patiently waiting for the continuation :3

Rei-Lin · 01-06-2007

Thanks again for the compliments, and rest assured more of the story will come along, I've just been out and about a lot more lately because of the holidays, so I've not gotten a chance to sit and write for a few weeks. Hopefully I'll sit down with a few hours to continue on with the adventures of Sally and Kelly, just don't worry if it takes me a while to get more written. Funny how you start something as a test to find out it becomes something more than you thought it would, so again, thanks for the support, and I'll see about getting the current chapter finished and possibly one or two more done by early next week.

Until then, if any of you have ideas, let me know, and if I like them, I might add them in.

Karbon · 01-07-2007

I still say a full, well detailed and slow change from female to completely male.

Maybe they go to the beach at night and turn into dolphins for fun. Who knows

gokowildheart · 01-08-2007

mm maybe one of them is seriously injured some way and the ring cant cure them unless there a dragon type person for the whole cycle of the moon XD so the other one has to smuggle the injured person out some how so they they may be charged ^^ or one of them make's a snecky wish to make the other into a gaintess when the other on eis in a part time job XD hehe just coming up with idea's but i belive what ever you can come up with will work perfectlly :P

12-21-2006	#39
roadside_fury Frequent Poster Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Small shack on Route 66. Posts: 168	Again, like he said, this is "The Process". That's what we focus on. We have way too many transformation movies, stories, and show focus on plot and character design, yet leaves the transformation lacking. Outside this website, I want plot and stuff, but here, it's all about the process, which in this case is done fantastically. __________________ Roadside_Fury, your everyday road rage specialist. "We again apologize for the subtitles. Those responsible for sacking those responsible have now been sacked."

12-21-2006	#42
Dragon FangX Draco artisto ecentrica Join Date: Jun 2005 Posts: 1,516	Your doing fine, Rei-Lin in my opinion. Keep doing what your doing as its been great thus far. ^^ __________________ http://dragon-fangx.deviantart.com/

12-21-2006	#38
ximpa Leecher Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 8	Yes, but why not create a story that revolves around it? It would be much more satisfying IMO. Otherwise you get a bunch of images and stories that all look like the same. Even a tiny plot can do better than a overly long and overdetailed description.

12-21-2006	#41
Rei-Lin Process Master Join Date: Oct 2005 Posts: 614	I can see your angle ximpa, and it is understandable that not everybody will enjoy a story for the same reasons. I have been enjoying focusing on the transformation aspects because I orginally started writing this story to see if I could write a transformation scene with so much detail that somebody could get a very vivid image in their head about what was happening. I think in terms of seeing my words animated first, and then try to put that action into writing. And of course, the sexual overtones are just a part of my way of getting away a little bit from the normal idea that most transformations in writing are neither enjoyable nor wanted. I like the idea of a body transformation that is intended to feel good, and of course in my twisted mind, feeling good is mostly related to a sort of sexual desire. If you read the whole story up to where I stopped, you'll see that not ever transformation involves having sex or masturbation, even if it starts to look like it wants to at the start. I even added more to the story and brought in another few characters to add a little more substance to the whole thing. Again, it's not easy to cater to every audience, but I am trying. There's a lot more plot to come about, and if you have been reading the story all the way, you'll probably notice some subtle hints in the plot that will tell you that not all of what Sally thinks is going on is going on for a good reason. I think some of it wasn't even intentional on my part, but I've started to reinforce the idea about consequences of actions. Anyway, again, I'm sorry if the story doesn't or can't appeal to everybody but the sexual overtones and long drawn out transformation scenes will remain a part of the story. That's the aspect on which the entire story was created on, and I could not undo it now. All I ask is that you read the story all the way through or wait until I've evolved things a little further and try again and then see if it's a better story than you thought it was. If it's not for you of course, it's not for you, I'm the same way when it comes to writing, some stories just don't do it for me. But I do appreciate the comments and the spurs to continue the story, and I appreciate constructive criticisim as I won't always see things that others will. In the end, I'm doing all this for the fans of the transformation, and I hope to add enough of a story that it becomes like a good werewolf movie with kick ass transformation scenes, rather than an ok movie with three second morphing scenes.

12-30-2006	#43
gokowildheart Process Fan Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 33	Wow .. just wow ... this is the most impressive well detail transformation story i've had the pleasure to read ... I'm really blow away by the amount of detail you've put ito every charge .. you can see it so well it's almost like watching a film .. I take my hat off to you Rei-Lin and would love to see how your going to carry this story on and see how the new couple handle this new power ^^

12-30-2006	#44
JaeDy ^.^/ The slash is my tail Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 215	Honestly, way up at the top in my opinion ^^ Brilliant stories.

01-06-2007	#45
Karbon Process Fan Join Date: Jun 2006 Posts: 47	Patiently waiting for the continuation :3

01-07-2007	#47
Karbon Process Fan Join Date: Jun 2006 Posts: 47	I still say a full, well detailed and slow change from female to completely male. Maybe they go to the beach at night and turn into dolphins for fun. Who knows

01-08-2007	#48
gokowildheart Process Fan Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 33	mm maybe one of them is seriously injured some way and the ring cant cure them unless there a dragon type person for the whole cycle of the moon XD so the other one has to smuggle the injured person out some how so they they may be charged ^^ or one of them make's a snecky wish to make the other into a gaintess when the other on eis in a part time job XD hehe just coming up with idea's but i belive what ever you can come up with will work perfectlly :P