Bad Sheep (Succubus TF, AR, TG, BE) (Complete)

frice2000 · 02-21-2012

Quite a few spelling errors in it which brought it down a bit. Other then that a interesting enough concept but I don't understand how some of the questions led to some of the changes he experienced. Tightening up the rules and making that more apparent would be pretty intriguing if you do more in this universe. Overall, not bad and am interested to see what you write in the future.

02-21-2012	#2
frice2000 "My way of thanking you" Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 401	Re: New story (Succubus TF, AR, TG, BE) Quite a few spelling errors in it which brought it down a bit. Other then that a interesting enough concept but I don't understand how some of the questions led to some of the changes he experienced. Tightening up the rules and making that more apparent would be pretty intriguing if you do more in this universe. Overall, not bad and am interested to see what you write in the future.