My first Giatess/growth story!!!!!

[make_her_grow]

ok. So this is like, my first GTS story, so go easy on me, lol. I'm not interested in any spelling and/or grammar errors that may be there really. I'd just like to know what you think of my story telling, and tell me wear you think I need improving.

Now, on to the subject of my story. It's a Charmed fan fic. So, for those who haven't seen the show, here's some background info.

The Charmed Ones are three witches: Piper, Phoebe, and Paige Halliwell. These sisters have a powerful sisterly bond, called the Power of Three. This bond strengthes thier Charmed powers, and thier sisterhood. together they fight the demons and other forces of evil the Underworld throws at them.

Here's some character bacgrounds:

Piper: The Eldest of the three sisters. She has the power to freeze people in time, and blow things up, all with a flick of her hands. While she's out in Public, she own's a club called P3 (Which is a nod to the Power of Three). She has two children, Wyatt and Chris, who are infants. Her husband is Leo.

Phoebe: Easily the weakest of the Halliwells. She once had the power to levitate objects, but that power was stripped from her wen she abused it. She now only has the power of premonition, that is, she can see the future when she touches certain objects. This power is more random than the other sisters'. in public she writes for a newspaper called the Bay Mirror. Her article is called Ask Phoebe, and it helps people with love problems. She has been married once, to a half demon named Cole. But he's long since been vanquished after he betrayed them.

Paige: The younest of the three Haliwells. She was born part witch, part white lighter. She has the power to "Orb" Or disapeear and reappear in a new place. She can call out any object and they to will dissappear and reappear. But she can direct the direction of where the object goes when she "Orbs" them. In public, she's never been married (yet), and tries constantly to find mister right. She once had a job as a social worker, but now she spends most of her time either at a temp job or at magic school.

Leo: Husband to Piper. He's the Halliwell's gaurdian angel, better known on that show as a white lighter. He guided them through rough times and protected them from thier toughest foes untill they where ready to face them. Recently, he was promoted to an elder, wich is the commanding ranks of the white lighters. Now he can no longer be with them as much as he liked, but he still helps out when ever he can. He has the power to heal wounds, and "Orb" at will.

Demons: The main Villains of the show. Thier powers depend on the type of demon. But most of them have the power to "Shimmer" (Which is thier version of "Orbing"), and form fireballs to shoot and destroy thier victims with. In public, they attempt to blend in with society so they don't expose themselves tothe public, until they are ready to strike at thier victims.

www.thecharmedones.com is a good place for more info on the characters and the show. Any advice is welcome. So, here's my first story!

Not bad, not bad. Definately could imagine the whole episode as if I was watching it, and what an episode it was. ^_^
I hope that people don't bash you too hard for the plentious yet insignificant "spelling and/or grammar errors", and I hope that you write another.
Thanks for posting!

[make_her_grow]

Originally Posted by tsokei

Not bad, not bad. Definately could imagine the whole episode as if I was watching it, and what an episode it was. ^_^
I hope that people don't bash you too hard for the plentious yet insignificant "spelling and/or grammar errors", and I hope that you write another.
Thanks for posting!

No problem. Actually, I already have #2 on the way in my three part trilogy. The second one is about Piper, the third will be about Paige. i'm not sure if i do any other fanfics around Charmed, but I have other fanfics ideas for other shows.

[make_her_grow]

Wow. So one whole person read my story?

[Sucht17]

Originally Posted by make_her_grow

Wow. So one whole person read my story?

There's over 1000 views so I'm sure more than one person read your story.

However, only one person stepped forward to comment.

It's tough, but don't let it discourage you. After all, it's only your first story.

[ProfessorMishap]

Sorry dude Stories don't get much feedback around that thar place called the internet. I should know lol.

[Stretch]

First off, I loved it. Very well written and I really hope you do more. Second, I never understood why writters never get the number of replys that a colager or artist gets. I imagine it's because that by the time someone finnishes reading a story, they forget all about leaving feedback.

[make_her_grow]

Originally Posted by LinkG07

Sorry dude Stories don't get much feedback around that thar place called the internet. I should know lol.

Figures lol.

Originally Posted by Stretch

First off, I loved it. Very well written and I really hope you do more. Second, I never understood why writters never get the number of replys that a colager or artist gets. I imagine it's because that by the time someone finnishes reading a story, they forget all about leaving feedback.

Probably. But thanks for the feedback dude.

Thanks to everyone who left feedback. As stated above, I already have the sequal well underway, and I have plans for a third already. So as they say on TV, stay tuned

[robclassact]

I dug your story. I'm a bigger fan of more mini-giantess 7'-12', but I enjoyed reading it since it did cover some of that ground, in the beginning anyways.

If you'd like someone to spellcheck/grammar check, let me know and I certainly wouldn't mind getting an advance copy and doing a little editing. as far as why writers don't get many replies, it may have something to do with how the written word takes a lot longer to take in than a picture. That's definitely an excuse and not a reason, but it something.

[make_her_grow]

wow. almost 200 views and only five feed backs? that stinks lol.

Shit, you're lucky to get five, mate. Most stories go unanswered at all.

[Abazaba]

Originally Posted by make_her_grow

wow. almost 200 views and only five feed backs? that stinks lol.

It was a good story. Just not a huge fan of Charmed. Not to say its a bad show. Just never quite stuck with me enough for me to be a fan of it. So good story, just next time use original people and places. You have the talent to do that. Just need to put your mind to it.