On July Afternoon

[Rubilax]

Originally Posted by Goldendawn

Wow no comments - I am a big fan of slow mental changes (as anyone who reads my stuff would know :P) so I liked it. Might have been bit better drawn out more - but I know how hard it is to keep the words flowing and not be boring (I have that problem a lot).

So good work - I hope to see more of your work .... could you share a location if you put your stuff on somewhere else?

I admit that I got a bit bored towards the end, so I decided to speed up the transformation process. Like you said, writing slow transformations ain't easy; it's tough to strike that write balance between a very gradual shift while also keeping the reader (and the writer for that matter) engaged in the whole ordeal.

As for the rest of my work, it's on my Deviantart account. I won't post the direct link here for non-specific reasons, but I'll send you the information via message so you can check it out.

Originally Posted by Quarma

For the most part I enjoyed this, though I think it's a bit weird that you explained her curves as stretching, thick, juicy, perky, etc., and yet she's apparently only slightly-above-average.

Edit: derp, you never said large.

Nope, you're right. In retrospect, the descriptions of the transformations are a bit too evocative compared to the final product so to speak. It's something that I've worked on improving for future endeavors. Still, I'm glad you enjoyed it nonetheless.