Spells ‘R Us: Visual Aid (AP, BE, Bimbo)

[_aliased]

Thanks for the critique guys.

The ending is something Blankage discussed with me at length, personally I just felt with the spirit of SRU it should be a "bad ending".

[Dragon FangX]

Originally Posted by _aliased

Thanks for the critique guys.

The ending is something Blankage discussed with me at length, personally I just felt with the spirit of SRU it should be a "bad ending".

I can agree with this, though perhaps the ending didn't have to be bad for her? Could have arranged where maybe she cuts a deal and she and her little brother trade places, returning her to normal and he gets stuck with the fate he nearly stuck her with. Or at the very least maybe something where the shopkeep will change her back if she does work for him at the shop in some form?

Only other thing you could have done would have been made where she deserved it and she's getting her just desserts. Like she grew egotistical and ultimatly did it to herself. Then it would be justified. This, the way it ends, just feels like a torture and that's not nearly as fun of a bad ending. Even just having her slowly lose herself with the new form would have atleast been better then what occurred.

That's all my thoughts. I don't want to discourage, I'm just trying to point out possible ideas in future endeavors to not make some of your audience at the end feel nearly as deflated emotionally. I would actually like to see something revolving around that doll at the start of the comic in the future. I'm big fan of doll and puppet TFs. XD

[chriskim019]

For stories like this, I would've preferred the main heroine to be completely petite and flat to begin with. Morgan thinks herself as a tomboy, but it didn't appeal to me that way much since she already seemed to have a decent body to me. If she lacked anything, I guess she seemed a little shorter than her peers. Maybe she was implied to represent many of the girls nowadays who are fine the way they are but are overly sensitive about their looks and are greedy for a sexier body, but due to Morgan having a decent body to begin with, the process department felt a bit weak. I would count this as a decent BE/Bimbofication comic but not so much for the AP aspect.