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My first TF story

03-05-2017

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Re: My first TF story

Very nice.

I did find one tiny mistake in the perspective though.

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She looked afraid of what I was about to say next.

Accidentally went to first person for one sentence. That one slip aside a very enjoyable read.

Last edited by TF-Viewer; 03-05-2017 at 06:41 PM.

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