Feeling Low - Shrink Fan Comics

[chocolatejr9]

Say, um... sorry for butting in on this conversation, but I'm actually hoping to write a Shrink Fan comic myself someday (not that it'll come out anytime soon: only got the first two pages written so far), and since you guys have been talking about everything you DON'T like about these types of stories, would anybody be willing to give me some pointers on how to write a GOOD story? I already have a rough idea where I want my story to go, but I feel I could maybe use a few pointers, just in case.

[Prof_Sai]

Feeling low: Giving her the mouse seemed really badly thought out. That thing could have bit her arm off. I'd have been horrified. Depression is a REALLY hard topic to write for.

Originally Posted by chocolatejr9

would anybody be willing to give me some pointers on how to write a GOOD story? I already have a rough idea where I want my story to go, but I feel I could maybe use a few pointers, just in case.

Okay.

Full sized villains may be hard to avoid, but don't let them dominate everything that happens. Keep them in the background. And give them some realistic motivation, not just I'm horrible, or my victim is horrible.

Your heroines aren't perfect. But shrinking is going to be a wildly disproportionate punishment for anything relatable. Accidental shrinking, or least bad choice, is the most fun IMHO.

It is probably easier to have multiple shrinkees, so that they can talk to each other and do more things. Find as many ideas you can about the shrinking itself and its consequences. Have your characters do things. A few panels of shock and despair are okay, but if they spend a half hour crying, (which is realistic) give them the dignity of cutting away or past it.

Write your ending first. I'm so sick of all these stories that are ten minute reads, and then to be continued in 5 years or never. And think about what state your character is in at the end. Is she left hating everyone else in the story? Feeling traumatized and powerless? The world doesn't need more of that right now.

I'd recommend fun and comedy, but the ShrinkFan house style doesn't handle it well.

[Doll-Elf]

Originally Posted by chocolatejr9

Say, um... sorry for butting in on this conversation, but I'm actually hoping to write a Shrink Fan comic myself someday (not that it'll come out anytime soon: only got the first two pages written so far), and since you guys have been talking about everything you DON'T like about these types of stories, would anybody be willing to give me some pointers on how to write a GOOD story? I already have a rough idea where I want my story to go, but I feel I could maybe use a few pointers, just in case.

I found that Invisible Girl was pretty good and consensual despite it not being fully lesbian like I would prefer. I just skip over the penis scenes.

And personally, I prefer a slower shrink where we really get interactions at the 2-4 feet marks. Any smaller and I lose interest normally.